The New Generation of Classic Short Stories

Vol. 17, No. 1

AP Style

by Dan Keane

     LA PAZ, Bolivia—Police say 24 people were killed in a tragic accident Monday when a bus plunged from a narrow mountain road.


MEMO FROM MEX. CITY:
Not everything sad is tragic. Evaluate on case-by-case basis.
More Bolivia context please.


     LA PAZ, Bolivia—Police say 47 people were killed Tuesday when a bus plunged from a narrow mountain road. Bolivia is the poorest country in South America.


MEMO FROM MEX. CITY:
Tragic fine for 47 dead. Just fyi.


     LA PAZ, Bolivia—Government officials say a new highway completed Wednesday outside the Bolivian capital will save lives.
     The paved route through the mountains replaces a narrow dirt track known as the Death Road, blamed for decades of fatal accidents.
     At the ribbon-cutting ceremony local dignitaries smashed clay pots of chicha, or corn beer, on the highway's spotless new concrete.
     The traditional Bolivian tribute sought favor from the Pachamama, the Earth goddess revered by much of Bolivia's indigenous population.


MEMO FROM MEX. CITY:
Please use Indian over indigenous.
Indigenous sounds like an endangered tree frog.
Readers know what an Indian is.
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